Hey guys, I started this as a place to get feedback on my work. My friends and such say it's good but I want to know what other people think. please give feedback. Positive feedback is great but, I can use criticism, too. Random thoughts are below, and poetry is in the sidebar. Thanks.
Why Do I Feel So Alone?
No one knows what I hide behind my smiling face.
I’m dying for some sympathy for a pain I just can’t place.
I don’t know why I feel so empty with friends at every turn.
But every night I lie awake filled with this hollow burn.
I know that you’d be there for me if I just asked you to.
But it’s 3 AM and I’m so lost, I don’t know what to do.
I cry myself to sleep at night, somebody tell me why.
I’ve got the world at my fingertips but all my dreams have gone so dry.
I hear you breathing next to me while I turn in bed.
You’re everything that I once loved, but the thought’s stuck in my head.
I don’t know if you’re right for me, or even who I am.
You don’t fill this hole inside of me. Maybe nothing can.
I find myself in the streets at night, wandering alone.
Wondering why I’m way out here with nowhere else to go.
No matter what I try to do I never feel fulfilled.
Not friends nor faith nor love have eased the pain I feel.
Why do I feel so miserable?
Why do I hurt this way?
What can fill my empty heart?
And keep loneliness at bay?
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Again, wow. This is amazing as well. It makes me think about me. I feel the same way in certain things you said. But hey, that's the glory of poetry. It may connect with the poet, and reach out to many others. It's great :)
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