Hey guys, I started this as a place to get feedback on my work. My friends and such say it's good but I want to know what other people think. please give feedback. Positive feedback is great but, I can use criticism, too. Random thoughts are below, and poetry is in the sidebar. Thanks.
Forever Ends
Tears will flow
and music will ring.
But even after you dry your eyes
this song is the only thing
that keeps my life from turning empty,
and I hate myself because I still hope
that these hunger pains might go away,
instead of learning to cope.
But when the world has gone dry
you can't even cry
because wasting your tears
is a cold way to die.
And when the home you once knew
turns as empty as you
and your desperate to scream
but you know if you do
that eventually the echos will all die away
and no one will hear, no one will stay
and even your nights aren't as black as the day.
And though finally April is turning May
the flowers stay hidden, the grass is still dead
because it's still December inside your head
I don't know how this fire gets fed
or how it can burn in a heart made of lead
But I know...
This won't end.
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ReplyDeleteI remember when i first read this poem almost a year ago on your facebook. Back in maybe april. It made me cry then, everytime i read it, and still makes me cry now. Little did i know that would be the first of many poems i read of yours that made me cry. Very proud of you jacob. I love u.
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