Hey guys, I started this as a place to get feedback on my work. My friends and such say it's good but I want to know what other people think. please give feedback. Positive feedback is great but, I can use criticism, too. Random thoughts are below, and poetry is in the sidebar. Thanks.
Don't Walk Away.
Unlock the cage and set me loose.
Cut me free. Take off my noose.
Release the trap, don’t let me die.
Answer my call, this feeble cry.
Time after time I try to flee.
Always ignored; my pathetic plee.
Why do I falter before my death
I wait for the scythe to steal my breath.
I sob in my cell, I cannot escape.
You’ve got the key to save me from fate.
Rescue me I pray.
But you walk away…
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Sad. Really, very sad
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